** Air Pollution ( draft )**
Air is one of the basic needs of all creatures on the earth . Clear-air life results in strong health which helps to produce an exellent work . Unlike ,life in polluted air which results in different diseases . There ara numerous pollutants of air in Egypt which are increasing nowadays . We have open -air waste burning , transportation , factories releases and human hamful activities . All those factors helped in high tempreture ( global warming ) for both environment and humans . Concequently , We have to look for suitable solutions to reduce its rising degree .
Concerning air pollution causes , there are various factors . Open-air waste burning is very dangerous process . Egyptions use it to get rid of garbage , but it created more serious problem which is air pollution by poisonous gases . Also transportation is dangerous especially in traffic jam . This is what happens in the egine : Fuel + air .......produces...... Hydrocarbons + Nitrogin Oxides + Carbon Dioxide + Carbon Monmxide + Water.
Factories releases are considered as the major reason behind air pollution . It produces various poisonous gases ( Nitrogin Oxides - Sulphor Dioxide ..... ) .Human daily activities also hep in air pollution. They smoke ciggretts , use pesticides and other materials .
High tempretures is the reasonable result of these pollutants . It affected both environment and humans . Environmental effects are obvious in agriculture . Most plants do not grow in this circumstances which led to the death of these plants . Poisonous gases rise to the sky made thick dark clouds and serious deadly diseases . The use of pesticides with all its kinds helps to widen the hole of ozon . It allows harmful rays to pass through the layers of atmosphere causing global warming and skin diseases . Regarding the effect on humans , high tempreture makes people exhausted . They are unable to finish their work . Little work led to high prices which is the most dangerous problem in the economy of Egypt .
Seeing how serious is the problem , solutions are a must . Factories should use filters to keep poisonous materials on , and get red of it correctly . Government should encourage people to use natural gas cars . More compaigns should start raising the awareness of people . They should know their environment and how to deal with it . People should also learn about pesticides and its bad effect on their environment . Scientists have to use the latest technologies and set up web sites . Those websites should give youth information in a simple and interesting way .
To sum up , air pollution is a serious problem . everyone have the responsibility to keep it clear . Without air their will not be life in our planet . Everyone have to work for the good of our environmrnt . When it is good , we are all good . If every Egyption took what is benifitable to nature , and leave the harmful , our environment would be clear . Everyone will be relaxed and have the ability to work more and more for the good of our country .
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comments on the first part of your essay:
ردحذفAir is one of the basic needs of all creatures on the earth . Clear¬-air life results in strong health which helps to produce an exellent (wrong spelling) work . Unlike ,life in polluted air (which) results in different diseases . There ara(wrong spelling) numerous pollutants of air in Egypt which are increasing nowadays . We have open -air waste burning , transportation , factories releases and human hamful activities . All those factors helped in high (raising ) tempreture ( global warming ) for both environment and humans . Concequently (wrong spelling), We have to look for suitable solutions to reduce its rising(wrong adj) degree .
Concerning air pollution causes (causes of air pollution), there are various factors . Open-air waste burning is (a)very dangerous process . Egyptions (wrong spelling) use it to get rid of garbage , but it created more serious problem (s) which is air pollution by poisonous gases . Also transportation is dangerous especially in traffic jam . This is what happens in the egine : Fuel + air .......produces...... Hydrocarbons + Nitrogin Oxides + Carbon Dioxide + Carbon Monmxide + Water.
Factories releases are considered as the major reason behind air pollution . It produces various poisonous gases ( Nitrogin Oxides - Sulphor Dioxide ..... ) .Human daily activities also hep(causes) in air pollution. They smoke ciggretts (wrong spelling) , use pesticides and other materials .
Comments on the second part of the essay
ردحذفHigh tempreture(s) is the reasonable result of these pollutants . It affected both environment and humans . Environmental effects are obvious in agriculture . Most plants do not grow in this circumstances which led to the death of these plants . Poisonous gases rise to the sky made thick dark clouds and serious deadly diseases . The use of pesticides with all its kinds helps to widen the hole of ozon . It allows harmful rays to pass through the layers of atmosphere causing global warming and skin diseases . Regarding the effect on humans , high tempreture makes people exhausted . They are unable to finish their work . Little work led to high prices which is the most dangerous problem in the economy of Egypt .
Seeing how serious is the problem , solutions are a must . Factories should use filters to keep poisonous materials on , and get red of it correctly . Government should encourage people to use natural gas cars . More compaigns should start raising the awareness of people . They should know their environment and how to deal with it . People should also learn about pesticides and its bad effect on their environment . Scientists have to use the latest technologies and set up web sites . Those websites should give youth information in a simple and (an) interesting way .
To sum up , air pollution is a serious problem . everyone have the responsibility to keep it clear . Without air their will not be life in our planet . Everyone have to work for the good of our environmrnt( wrong spelling). When it is good , we are all good . If every Egyption (wrong spelling) took what is benifitable to nature , and leave the harmful , our environment would be clear . Everyone will be relaxed and have the ability to work more and more for the good of our country
hi noha
ردحذفyour essay is good but i've some comments on it
your essay has a clear main idea and an interesting introduction
you should focus on spelling
also you've grammatical mistakes
your essay is clear and direct and organised ideas
good work noha